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Tell me how you think.Dont just say all poems suck.
Ghost, Ghost, full of pain
Crying out a bloody rain
Its body decays and rots
Once remembered but now not
When seen agian it wants to cause kane
One bite kills faster than a train
When devours the murderous host
All is well at least for the most
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Second stanza is awful, and the first line of it doesn't make sense. The first stanza is solid, though.
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Kills faster than a train?
A TRAIN?!
What the fuck?
Honestly.
Go get creativity.
It ran off somewhere.
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(11-13-2008, 12:16 AM)Oddball Wrote: Kills faster than a train?
A TRAIN?!
What the fuck?
Honestly.
Go get creativity.
It ran off somewhere.
This but a little politer.
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I made this back in 3rd grade so dont flip out about a bad poem. This is quite random but I got a D for it being to scary for 3rd graders.
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I don't think that's why you got a D...
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(11-17-2008, 06:00 PM)GrooveMan.exe Wrote: I don't think that's why you got a D...
mwahahahaha
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(11-17-2008, 06:00 PM)GrooveMan.exe Wrote: I don't think that's why you got a D...
Thank you Grooveman for being my first laugh today
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(11-17-2008, 05:47 PM)megazario Wrote: random but I got a D for it being to scary for 3rd graders.
Apparently, all the children in your third grade class are pussies.
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(11-17-2008, 06:00 PM)GrooveMan.exe Wrote: I don't think that's why you got a D...
Everyone wanted to post this.
Not all poems suck. This one just does.
Also, what grade are you, and why are you showing old shit.
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No actually Rags they didn't care the teacher is just a fagget.
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If I was a teacher I'd give you a 50 because only half the poem is really solid. Now that is an F. I think the teacher was being a bit more generous when they gave you a D.
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(11-18-2008, 04:08 PM)megazario Wrote: No actually Rags they didn't care the teacher is just a fagget.
fagot
but regardless
you suck
Why are you posting a 3rd grade poem and wanting criticisms? It says to post what we think of it.
What grade are you in?
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dont know why everyone is bashing this so much
the first stanza realy inst that bad
