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New Edition!
http://img337.imageshack.us/img337/4764/issue207.jpg
Because of some really stressful time constraints, this wasn't as great as I'd hoped. It was to be 5 features instead of 4, and a greater integration of your opinions. Guycott lucked out here - I hope you don't mind me using a (neatened version) of your submission.
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[5:22:59 PM] Mr. Shyflower: what's not to NO MORE HEROES 2
great issue
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06-04-2010, 04:37 PM
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Quote:4 things that need to be included in more games...
Quote:looks at 5 of his favourites
I suppose that was just a simple typo, right? Or is there a secret fifth thing, and we have to go through the magazine with a fine-tooth comb to find it?
Nice writing, though.
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ARG that's such an obvious oversight. This is why I run my editions past you guys before we go to print - they never proofread my work. D= And before anyone else says anything, I am aware of the "gammes" typo in the Soundtracks paragraph. =c
Edit: Sploder, there WAS meant to be 5, and the last one was cut due to time and space constrain- UH I MEAN
IT'S A REFERENCE TO IMPLY THAT MY 5TH THING IS THAT MORE GAMES SHOULD HAVE HIDDEN CONTENT. YES.
This issue really does have shitty production quality. I'm so sorry.
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you should mention that
in fine print underneath the article
provided they allow you to use fine print
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Naw, naw. I can go back to the offices tomorrow and put right what one went wrong. I should just be better at noticing things like that.
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well, I can help with some hardxXxcore proofreading if you're going to fix up your article~
4 things that need to be included in more games...:
1) Customisation (should probably be spelled "Customization")
"...customised..." --- shouldn't it be "customized"?
3) Local Multiplayer
"But now consoles have integrated internet, a lot of games publishers..." --- should probably be "But now that consoles have integrated internet, a lot of game publishers..."
"...and has it's place..." --- and has it is place
Blur:
"All the real world locations and cars to please the realistic racing enthusiast,..." --- fragment :C
"With both local and online multiplayer, what's not to" --- cut off
NMH2: Deadly Struggle
"...with a beam-katana; once the #1 Ranked assassin in the US until he retired to watch anime and wrestling DVDs" --- this is just awkward to me :/ Maybe get rid of the semicolon and switch in "who was" ?
Sin and Punishment
"...nonesnsical plot..." --- small typo
Fist of the North Star
"...Fist of the North Star..." --- italics problem
"The transition to 3Dhas..." --- 3Dhas
"...ecellently..."
"...persuade you to give it wa watch..." --- small typos here too
"...rediculous opening." --- shouldn't it be "ridiculous"?
And this is all I'm seeing that you should look into fixing. I've noticed a few semicolons here and there that could easily be removed, but they're probably just as fine where they are now
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No, because I'm english, Customisation has an 's'.
All the rest is valid, though.
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(06-04-2010, 05:22 PM)GrooveMan.exe Wrote: No, because I'm english, Customisation has an 's'.
Oh
I was just going with Firefox's automatic spell-checker :/
I'm guessing this also applies to Rediculous, right?
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06-05-2010, 09:51 AM
(This post was last modified: 06-05-2010, 10:39 AM by GrooveMan.exe.)
That might just be me being dumb, unfortunately.
Man, I go back to the offices to fix it, and they've actually fixed everything for me!
THE VERY NERVE
But I still tweaked it anyway; and made a few sentences smother. This is pretty much the finished version.
http://img411.imageshack.us/img411/4764/issue207.jpg
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OH SHIT GUYS RETRO ISSUE
I found that the beta layout for Issue 202 was still on our servers. Now you get to see what the formatting of the page was like before I became editor, and what's possibly my most favourite article...
http://img686.imageshack.us/img686/8382/issue202.jpg
Holy shit the editor before me sucked.
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