Coldest Nightmare

[Kriven]

Mueh.


I stare at the cold day,
Through the frosted screen.
In the snow she stands,
A figure too seldom seen.

I forget to breathe,
For just a moment.
Pound the glass.
And immediately lament.

She looks at me,
Shakes her head,
Then turns away.
My heart feels dead.



No real... form, I guess.

[Cshad]

I really like the first part. The rest of it kinda, well, sucks. The rythem is inconsistent and it stops rhyming half way through.

[Adam]

I really like it! Very melancholy.