09-05-2015, 07:06 PM
As much as I'd like to use an idea like that, I can't really pull it off now without breaking the flow of the story. Still, even though it was originally just a simple nod to Parakarry's habit of misplacing letters in the original game, I'm up including it as a story element that leads to a similar gag in the future.
Basically, what I have in mind is that Parakarry is having letter troubles again and is looking around for lost letters. The one he dropped in the short was actually picked up by Green (it's offscreen, but the new short will show a flashback that extends to the point where Green picks up the letter) and he is keeping it until a good time to return it. Red eventually finds it and tries to read it, but it leads to a whole situation where the letter goes back and forth from Mario and his allies (including Green) to Red. Eventually, Red reads the letter, but as it turns out, it's from Black's pen pal and it's loaded with insults towards Red. Then, Parakarry tells Red that mail theft is a kingdom offense and make it clear that he won't get away with it this time. Thus, Parakarry Shell Shoots Red clean in the stomach. What do you think?
[Spoiler='Anyway, I wrote a little bit more of the script.']
(The scene cuts to the outside of the Koopa Bros. Fortress. There is a sign that reads "Help Wanted." The scene then cuts back to the bedroom of the Koopa Bros. where all furniture and possessions owned by Black are gone. Red is loafing on his bed, Yellow is at the table drumming his fingers, and Green is sitting on the floor bummed out about Black leaving.)
Red: Any other bright ideas, dudes?
Green: Red, do we, like, need to be a part of this whole evil rigmarole? We already got our shells handed to us as it is...
Red: *Is visibly annoyed* Any BRIGHT ideas from a SMART guy?
Yellow: Even though Green raises a good point, we only attempted to capture two out of eight members of his party.
Red: *Gets out of bed* Oh yeah! It's to soon to throw the towel, bros! Heck, we might get lucky and even bag the toughest on the team!
Yellow: Now there's the Red I know! *Gets out of his chair and starts pacing* Now, we can't go to Lavalava Island since my last boat prototype nearly costed me my right hand and neither of us can swim…
Green: I can totally swim!
Yellow: Across a mass of water like the ocean?
(Green looks sad for a moment.)
Yellow: Hey, Green, at least you we're trying to assist us, so don't look so down.
Red: Ugh… Must ya baby him? Look, I thought about the other places while you're ramblin' about swimmin' and something about a boat and your left hand-
Yellow: Right hand, actually.
Red: WHATEVER! As I was sayin', Koopa Village's out since it's not like they'll roll out the red carpet for the likes of us, while takin' on Spike means dealin' with that WACK JOB of a girlfriend.
Yellow: You mean the same girlfriend who threw a Spiny Egg with enough force that it had to be surgically removed from this poor guy who only looked at Lakilester funny? *Shivers*
(Green nods.)
Red: Okay, what about that ghost chick? Wasn't her name Lady Boo or somethin'?
Green: Lady Bow, dude. Besides, we can't go to the Forever Forest anyways.
Red: And why's that? You a Scaredy Rat?
Green: Um, aren't you, like, the guy who can't even look at the entrance?
(Red shoots Green an annoyed look.)
Green: SORRY! SORRY! Just askin'… Look, what I was tryin' to say is that the leafy dude who knows the place pulled a Houdini after something happened in Toad Town that landed him in deep doo-doo. Dunno what it was, but I think it had somethin' to do with the bushes outside Bow's pad and how how he, like, made Tayce T. cook a bunch of weird green cakes with that blue thing on top.
(Out of anger, Red lunges at Green and grabs him by the neck.)
Red: THERE YOU GO AGAIN MESSING A PERFECTLY GOOD PLAN UP, YA BUZZKILL!
Green: *Franticly* WAIT-WAIT-WAIT! THERE'S WATT! WATT!
(Red lets go of Green out of confusion.)
Red: What?
Yellow: He means Watt as in the baby Lil' Sparky. If I remember correctly from the reports from Bowser, Mario saved her from a ghost who kidnapped her.
Red: Kidnapped, eh? *Grins and rubs hands together* This could be our chance, dudes! Play our cards right and not only he'll bag a baby, but he'll also take on the rest of those CHUMPS!
Yellow: No offense, but how you mentioned that he'll "bag a baby" sounds very… Questionable…
Red: *Puts his hand on Yellow's back* Ya worry too much, bro.! Once we meet this spook in the Toy Box, you'll feel much better about all this!
(Yellow still looks skeptical, but still walks with Red out of the room. Green picks himself up after his strangling and takes a deep breath as he slowly walks forward.)
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Basically, what I have in mind is that Parakarry is having letter troubles again and is looking around for lost letters. The one he dropped in the short was actually picked up by Green (it's offscreen, but the new short will show a flashback that extends to the point where Green picks up the letter) and he is keeping it until a good time to return it. Red eventually finds it and tries to read it, but it leads to a whole situation where the letter goes back and forth from Mario and his allies (including Green) to Red. Eventually, Red reads the letter, but as it turns out, it's from Black's pen pal and it's loaded with insults towards Red. Then, Parakarry tells Red that mail theft is a kingdom offense and make it clear that he won't get away with it this time. Thus, Parakarry Shell Shoots Red clean in the stomach. What do you think?
[Spoiler='Anyway, I wrote a little bit more of the script.']
(The scene cuts to the outside of the Koopa Bros. Fortress. There is a sign that reads "Help Wanted." The scene then cuts back to the bedroom of the Koopa Bros. where all furniture and possessions owned by Black are gone. Red is loafing on his bed, Yellow is at the table drumming his fingers, and Green is sitting on the floor bummed out about Black leaving.)
Red: Any other bright ideas, dudes?
Green: Red, do we, like, need to be a part of this whole evil rigmarole? We already got our shells handed to us as it is...
Red: *Is visibly annoyed* Any BRIGHT ideas from a SMART guy?
Yellow: Even though Green raises a good point, we only attempted to capture two out of eight members of his party.
Red: *Gets out of bed* Oh yeah! It's to soon to throw the towel, bros! Heck, we might get lucky and even bag the toughest on the team!
Yellow: Now there's the Red I know! *Gets out of his chair and starts pacing* Now, we can't go to Lavalava Island since my last boat prototype nearly costed me my right hand and neither of us can swim…
Green: I can totally swim!
Yellow: Across a mass of water like the ocean?
(Green looks sad for a moment.)
Yellow: Hey, Green, at least you we're trying to assist us, so don't look so down.
Red: Ugh… Must ya baby him? Look, I thought about the other places while you're ramblin' about swimmin' and something about a boat and your left hand-
Yellow: Right hand, actually.
Red: WHATEVER! As I was sayin', Koopa Village's out since it's not like they'll roll out the red carpet for the likes of us, while takin' on Spike means dealin' with that WACK JOB of a girlfriend.
Yellow: You mean the same girlfriend who threw a Spiny Egg with enough force that it had to be surgically removed from this poor guy who only looked at Lakilester funny? *Shivers*
(Green nods.)
Red: Okay, what about that ghost chick? Wasn't her name Lady Boo or somethin'?
Green: Lady Bow, dude. Besides, we can't go to the Forever Forest anyways.
Red: And why's that? You a Scaredy Rat?
Green: Um, aren't you, like, the guy who can't even look at the entrance?
(Red shoots Green an annoyed look.)
Green: SORRY! SORRY! Just askin'… Look, what I was tryin' to say is that the leafy dude who knows the place pulled a Houdini after something happened in Toad Town that landed him in deep doo-doo. Dunno what it was, but I think it had somethin' to do with the bushes outside Bow's pad and how how he, like, made Tayce T. cook a bunch of weird green cakes with that blue thing on top.
(Out of anger, Red lunges at Green and grabs him by the neck.)
Red: THERE YOU GO AGAIN MESSING A PERFECTLY GOOD PLAN UP, YA BUZZKILL!
Green: *Franticly* WAIT-WAIT-WAIT! THERE'S WATT! WATT!
(Red lets go of Green out of confusion.)
Red: What?
Yellow: He means Watt as in the baby Lil' Sparky. If I remember correctly from the reports from Bowser, Mario saved her from a ghost who kidnapped her.
Red: Kidnapped, eh? *Grins and rubs hands together* This could be our chance, dudes! Play our cards right and not only he'll bag a baby, but he'll also take on the rest of those CHUMPS!
Yellow: No offense, but how you mentioned that he'll "bag a baby" sounds very… Questionable…
Red: *Puts his hand on Yellow's back* Ya worry too much, bro.! Once we meet this spook in the Toy Box, you'll feel much better about all this!
(Yellow still looks skeptical, but still walks with Red out of the room. Green picks himself up after his strangling and takes a deep breath as he slowly walks forward.)
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